Time's changing us
People are moving on
Promise you'll never forget me
Make your path
Through this life
Find out who you're meant to be
Promise you won't let them change you
I'll still be here
While you're fighting to make your mark
Out there
Promise you'll remember me
I'll never forget you
What you meant to me
Find out where you're going
Find out who you're going to be
And while you're out there
Making your own way
Promise you will remember me
Nice poem. I definitely feel the sad tone in this piece. Maybe even a sense of loneliness. I would change the "gonna" to "going to."
ReplyDeleteWho ever this is about they should read this and remember it all ways
ReplyDeleteThis is definitely a good message, but maybe add some stanzas to break it up a little.
ReplyDeleteThis is am-ah-zing! It's like Adele or something.
ReplyDeleteDefinate sense of your emotion, good job. Consider not using conjunctions.
ReplyDeleteThis is crazy good. Wow. That's all I have to say. Wooooooow.
ReplyDeleteSoo good, write a book. I wont read it,(I cant read) but im sure millions of others will. (:
ReplyDeletegood sense of emotion, almost made me cry!
ReplyDeleteI'd split the poem up a bit differently but in all it was nicely done.
ReplyDeleteGood message. Well worded and a great poem
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